Written by admin on Nov 13th, 2009 | Filed under:
arizona special education
When I think of the world, there is no end, I either think of issues the world is taking, how other countries are, is there someone else like me out there, or just imply my world. The way Im living now is not so great for my parents, employment is cutting down short, so that means there is no work for my dad. My mom either works with my dad or is a housewife. So when it comes to tell them what I want it is a little hard. I have another side of me that’s really close and special, who is my twin sister Celene. So our parents have two to take care of us for now. I don’t only have Celene, from my mom’s side I have an older sister name Marisa who lives in Guadalajara Mex. and an older brother name Christian who lives n Phoenix Arizona with his wife and daughter. We recently visited me sister in the summer and had a lot of fun at the beach with her.
At time it would be awkward for my sister and I because my mom at time would treat her special because its her first born child and because she left her when she was 11 years old and my brother was about 4-5 years old. She left them in good hands, my grandparents, then she decide to come here to America. As for my brother we visit him about once or twice a year but he visits us constantly, so its okay. There is sort of issues with my mom and him about my niece, about him and his wife not speaking in Spanish to my niece. My mom thinks its very important for her grandchild to speak Spanish because it comes from generations and because it’s the responsibility for my brother and my sister in law to teach its to her. At the same time I know that my mom is able to understand English speaking but she would prefer for Eva my niece to speak Spanish. Finally on my father’s side I also have a brother Fernando and a sister Merari. My brother just recently got to America about 3 years ago and in the other hand my sister lives in Guatemala and she’s married and has children around my age.
As for my community and where I live in, isn’t that much different to what I see in other cities and countries. For example, the part of LA that I live in is known as South Central. My neighborhood is quite and at times it is violent but I never been part of those situations where authority has been involved. Its usually all the other kids that have everyone going crazy in my community. When outsiders come to the community they see run down environments and just judge us by how they see the surroundings. If you want to apply for a job they see everything right like your applications and your personal letter, but the other thing they see it is your color and ethnicity. They think that being minority you might not qualify for a job. This also happens in other countries like our fellow neighbor Mexico, GDL has some slight discrimination too even though everyone there has the same skin color they basically are based on your financial status, physical appearance, and in what class you are in ( middle, low, etc). People don’t notice this but it is true.
Lastly, my education has been on top of things. At first, I thought high school was going to mess me up but it didn’t. I just got better in what Im good doing. My parents had enrolled me in a new green dot charter school which at first didn’t wanted to attend but then I used to it. Then the idea of being the first graduating class of their school would be awesome. Plus, the school was mostly about creating anything you wanted or being the first at what your good doing. Sports is my specialty, I love being active, challenging and just having fun outdoors. When I was younger my first sport was basketball and then I began playing any sports that were offered. I remember me and sister had inspired my fifth grade teacher, and she said she wishes seeing us in the Olympics someday like Serena and Venus Williams. I will never forget that, that saying just inspired me more, and giving me more choices in life. Since then on, coaches just see me and my sister like all surprised. They see us like all stars because any sport that they put in front of us, we are just prefect in doing.
This needs a lot of work. It is rambling and their are grammar errors. I can’t even tell what the original question was.
You need a thesis statement. Something that describes the whole essay. If the essay is supposed to be about how the world you live in has shaped your goals, you need to say that. You also need to include your goals and not just talk about how you are good at tennis and where your sister lives.
This "When I think of the world, there is no end, I either think of issues the world is taking, how other countries are, is there someone else like me out there, or just imply my world." has no connection to the rest of the essay, which is about your family. It does not belong.
I know this is just a draft, but it should have been spell checked.
You have way too many sentences beginning with "So" and "At." It is too repetitive.
I have absolutely no idea what this means "Lastly, my education has been on top of things."
You need to do some work on this essay. Try to improve it with my suggestions. Then go ask your English teacher for feedback. If you current English teacher can’t give you feedback, ask a former teacher. This essay needs significant work.